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Hi, I'd like to ask for your opinion(s) on this book. I can provide the excerpt (I got it off a website, lol) Could you please provide your opinion on the grammar and storyline? Thank you everyone. Here's the excerpt: The Floraad Conflict The pale moon glowed ominously in the night sky, as the dark clouds rumbled and thundered, radiating a surge of intensity and suspense surrounding the two armies that currently battled. “Go, my comrades!” shouted a winged lieutenant. “Fight those beasts and show them no mercy!” A horn of warfare sounded and a wave of angelical beings charged down the battlefield towards their horrific foes. The army of Floraad, a city of feminine fairies and masculine angels, clashed with their grotesque enemies on the side of the Arborhex, a kingdom of faceless botanical creatures known as Botonians. Several Floraad soldiers dashed into the dark sky, as the wooden beasts of the opposing side jumped several yards into the air, causing many aerial battles before the ground battles could even begin. The two sides attacked and blasted their enemies with their weapons and magical energies. Floraad’s general appeared at the top of a high cliff. The Angelic with long silver hair tied into a ponytail and gleaming amethyst armor, stared out onto the dark battlefield, where the only light came from the conflagrating blazes that burned down fairy homes. He did not know why the Botonians used flames, for their bodies were vulnerable to fire, but he knew they would do anything to conquer the fairy city. His feathered wings unfolded and his luminous body jumped off the cliff. He opened his wings to full span and glided down to join his comrades in battle. He gashed a Botonian’s face, upon landing, with his graceful sword. As the injured and shrieking beast gripped its face with its ligneous arm, the Angelic grabbed the creature’s head, and blasted a ball of emerald energy. The monstrous head burned into dark ashes, as the body fell motionlessly to the ground. The general drew out his dagger and jammed it directly into the creature’s heart, stopping its beating rhythm and preventing the head from regenerating. Many of the other Angelics charged and sliced their enemies, while the Arborhex’s army did likewise. When the angelical general looked around, only sorrow and death caught his eyes. Gangs of wooden beasts engulfed several of his soldiers. One Angelic managed to escape through flight, but a violent bolt struck him down. The general raced towards his fallen comrade and attempted to rescue him, but failed, for the injured body fell to its demise. The devastated Angelic clenched his teeth in anger, as a group of the Arborhex’s creatures spotted him. They blasted beams of violet bolts at the airborne general, who powerfully countered with a stream of green flames. When the two rays of magic struck, a low and thunderous crash roared. Many of the combatants ceased fighting and stared at the deadlock. The general could feel his body shaking, as his altitude decreased. “I will not be beaten by mere wooden puppets!” he yelled. He pushed forward and his flames forced the opposing stream back. The losing Botonians snarled, as more of their comrades gathered, to add to the losing bolts. The general held on tight and shoved more power into his flames, while his soldiers aided him by merging their energy with his. Suddenly, the struggle between the two sides concluded in a draw, when both groups shoved high amounts of energy into the deadlock, blasting the ligneous beasts and their foes back. Many of the Angelics remained airborne, while many others, along with their enemies, landed roughly upon the battlefield. When a wounded Floraad soldier saw more of his botanical enemies pouring continuously from the horizon, he searched for his general and shouted, “There’s too many of them!” The general sliced a wooden beast in two and commanded with a vociferous voice, “Surround Shae Palace, and protect our queen!” The surviving soldiers formed an enormous circle around the marble structure, as the general made his way in. Upon entering, the general could see a ceiling of clear glass, where the moon shone its light upon the queen, making her overwhelmingly majestic. Green lights lit marble walls, where the engraved names of past Angelic kings and Fairy queens showed. In the center of the circular room stood a giant table blanketed by an enormous map. The queen stood before the table of strategies, her hair bundled up into a silver gray ball, with a diamond tiara sitting at the front edge of her head. Her silk dress hung down to the floor and a purple silk scarf wrapped her aged neck, where jewels of value clung. A pair of emerald butterfly wings sprouted from her back. Her almond-shaped eyes glanced up at the approaching soldier. The general bowed on a single knee. “My queen, they have surrounded and out-numbered us.” He stood. “My men are trying to hold them back.” “No Sorry about the cut off. There's more, at this link: https://secure.advbookstore.com/?page=shop/detail&product_id=214 I did right this. I have another question. What should I do if someone gave me a terrible book review? Here's the review that I recently read. http://www.target.com/Arborhex-Nguyen-David-H/dp/1597551813 Oh my god, lol. I wrote "I did right this." I meant "I did wrtie this." Sorry everyone. Oh my god, lol. I wrote "I did right this." I meant "I did write this." Sorry everyone.

Public Comments

1. Sounds like an exciting story! Did you write this?
2. It's okay. There's plenty of room for improvement as far as imagery and word use goes, but if you got that nailed down, the story line could flourish. I love fantastical, Alice in Wonderland- esque races. It's certainly not worthy of that awful review. Ouch... You're on the school newspaper with them? Maybe they just have a grudge. "Boo hoo, I didn't get a book published. I deserve a published book! " Just ignore the burn, and look to improve, right? Good luck, and good job on the publish!
3. from a teenage girls pov(me) i wouldnt read it, sorry! bu id say boys would luv it! its good for boys to read. sorry again bye ----------------------- wicked lovely= team seth ink exchange= team niall the host= team ian an jamie twilight= team edward a certain slant of light= team james and helen ------------------------
4. @Fanpire: didchu even read tha title? he wrote that he got it from A BOOK. loool --i think it's great :D
5. Nice...looks like your on your way to being a star!